Here’s the next snippet from my nameless trunked manuscript. My first attempt at a full-length novel, it was written when vampires were still in vogue (though these vampires have pseudo-scientific origins). The prospect of revising the whole thing is too daunting, but let’s see if I can salvage it one tiny bit at a time. (Disclaimer: My writing has significantly improved over the years.)
For last week’s post (as well as all the ones from Warlock’s Pawn and Tower in the Woods), click here. In the previous snippet, my hero (Hades) had just told his sister (Nell) to find him a different vampire detection expert despite my heroine’s (Cora) 0% false positive rate.
His sister’s back straightened a split second before she stomped her foot. The impact caused his granite desk to rattle. “You gave me an impossible task. I succeeded. And now you want me to start over again? I’m not your lackey.”
He lifted one eyebrow. “Until your powers mature, that word describes you to perfection. Stop behaving like a mortal child. You’re almost a century old.”
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Tara Quan 
Ohhh, he dissed his sis. Isn’t that some of the most entertaining reads, sibling rivalry banter. I like the relationship between these two already, great reading. Can’t wait to se where you take it.
Stamping her foot hard enough to shake the ground – I think Hades might just be in big trouble. And he responds by raising one eyebrow. This is good fun – I’m looking forward to seeing more.
What is his issue with this expert? Whatever it is, I’m enjoying the results of it. I want to see this to the end.
I think he’s underestimating both women.