Science Fiction and Fantasy Saturday No. 32 (#sffsat) – Rescued Snippet from a Trunked Manuscript – #Scifi #Fantasy #Romance

Here’s the next snippet from my nameless trunked manuscript. My first attempt at a full-length novel, it was written when vampires were still in vogue (though these vampires have pseudo-scientific origins). The prospect of revising the whole thing is too daunting, but let’s see if I can salvage it one tiny bit at a time. (Disclaimer: My writing has significantly improved over the years.)

For last week’s post (as well as all the ones from Warlock’s Pawn and Tower in the Woods), click here. In the previous snippet, we got to know my hero’s sister, Nell, a little bit better.

“Judging from her appearance, I could break all her bones with a single blow.”

His sister snorted. “If that were our benchmark, no human would be fit for recruitment.” She rose, circled the table, and took control of his computer. With a few taps, she enlarged the human’s image. “Look at where Ms. Springfield chose to sit. Look at the way she’s scanning the lobby. She’s a trained operative. If you’d bothered to read her file, you’d know she’s perfect for the job.”

Twitter: #sffsat SFFSat is a group of writers sharing snippets from both published and unpublished works of science fiction and fantasy. You can read more about the group by clicking the banner to the left, as well as follow links to the other participants. Any comments are much appreciated!

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10 responses to “Science Fiction and Fantasy Saturday No. 32 (#sffsat) – Rescued Snippet from a Trunked Manuscript – #Scifi #Fantasy #Romance

  1. Yeah, the idea is to avoid situations where one could have bones broken,

  2. Nell may be sharp-tempered, but she’s sharp-witted, too – she can spot the details that show their visitor may look delicate but is actually competent. Good snippet – I still think this rescued manuscript is worth resurrecting.

  3. You’ve made Nell a strong protag, which is what readers want. You use phrases such as “took control” to support her character. Nice job.

  4. Wow. What a way to size someone up! Creative detail. Lousy frail humans. I wonder how one joins the Vampire Recruitment League. Guess you’ll have to post some more so I can find out. Fun read!!!

  5. Sometimes, you just have to look past the physical traits. Nice job!

  6. Maybe I’m a trained operative…who knew sitting down and scanning a room were the indicators? 🙂

  7. Oh, nice setup for some action to come! Something tells me not to mess with Nell.

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