Science Fiction and Fantasy Saturday No. 30 (#sffsat) – Rescued Snippet from a Nameless Trunked Manuscript – #Fantasy #Scifi

After finishing the first chapter of Warlock’s Pawn last week (click here for past snippets), I found myself in a bit of a quandary. The novella veers into very adult territory soon after, and there’s a publisher limit on how much of the book I can post on my blog. As such, it is time to move on.

My next two finished works are in the wrong genre, and my WIP isn’t quite ready for prime time. What’s a girl to do but dig into the past?

Here are 10 rescued sentences from a Nameless Trunked Manuscript. It was my first attempt at a full-length novel and harkens to a time when writing steamy scenes still made me blush. It was also written when vampires were still in vogue (though these vampires have pseudo-scientific origins). I actually hit 70k on this one, but most of it is quite horrible. The prospect of revising the whole thing is too daunting, but let’s see if I can salvage it one snippet at a time. (Disclaimer: My writing has significantly improved over the years.)

“She’s not what I expected.” Hades Kerosian scrutinized the video feed on his ultra-slim computer monitor. The stitched leather soles of his Italian-made shoes tapped a steady rhythm on the dark marble floor. Though there were no lamps or overhead light, the room was swathed in an orange glow.

He tapped his keyboard to zoom-in on the high definition image of a fidgety young woman. Dwarfed by the waiting room’s blocky armchair, she looked delicate enough to snap in half. She sported a black T-shirt and dark jeans. Her mahogany hair was pulled into a sleek ponytail and slipped out the back of a pink baseball cap. Yellow-tinted sunglasses covered most of her face.

Twitter: #sffsat SFFSat is a group of writers sharing snippets from both published and unpublished works of science fiction and fantasy. You can read more about the group by clicking the banner to the left, as well as follow links to the other participants. Any comments are much appreciated!

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16 responses to “Science Fiction and Fantasy Saturday No. 30 (#sffsat) – Rescued Snippet from a Nameless Trunked Manuscript – #Fantasy #Scifi

  1. Hi Tara! You’ve nothing to be ashamed of with this snippet. Nice descriptive sequence that reveals quite a lot about the protagonist, and also some interesting hints about the young woman. It’s certainly worth seeing if there is something else salvageable here.

  2. Always interesting to see those trunk novels come out into the light…I have one of my own out there somewhere that I’m fairly certain should never be wielded on the masses. 🙂

  3. Same here, ya know. I think we’ve all got those floating around. I too am daunted by the thought of giving mine a scrub up.

    Loved this snippet. Early writing it may be, but it’s still vivid.

  4. Yep, I got a few hidden tales, buried deep. One day I’ll drag them out and cringe… This is a great snippet…love the detail, description. Keep it coming!

  5. A pink cap with mahogany hair and yellow sunglasses? Vivid, but I’m not sure whether it describes the woman or the culture.

  6. This looks like a decent snippet to me, but I do have to question the woman’s fashion sense.

  7. Yeah, this was a great snippet. I dump MS’s all over the place, but good scenes always find new life in new stories. The book I’m working on now (TGfA 3) is a reworking of several scenes that got filed as trashed long ago.

  8. Great physical descriptions of the characters here, Tara! 🙂

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